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Dysfunctional


Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 139 /260 /173
Words: 20
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Dysfunctional


Who, autumn, who
leaves differences
untied
in kisses: chilled lips
upon my weary
rugged
nose?




Submitted on 2012-10-01 10:00:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Oooh I love fall, you've captured it greatly
| Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]
  :) This little poem brought a smile to my face.
| Posted on 2012-10-03 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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