Forbidden Fruit

Author: LiveInDreams Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 3 /6 /8 Words: 105

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Forbidden Fruit

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A forbidden fruit  The most exciting  It's dangerous and flawless But untouchable  They grow in a bright green meadow  On the tallest tree It's hangs there Just tempting me  No one can touch it But the tallest giants in this broken society  Forbidden fruit is the ripest fruit Perfectly grown and soft It's skin like satin  No mare to be seen If only it would drop down to me My arms are too short  My legs just as long  My fingers just barely reach It's not fair I say And I'll say it all day Until it finally falls off And drops down to me

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