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Forbidden Fruit

Author: LiveInDreams
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Words: 105
Class/Type: Poetry /Society
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Forbidden Fruit

A forbidden fruit 
The most exciting 
It's dangerous and flawless
But untouchable 
They grow in a bright green meadow 
On the tallest tree
It's hangs there
Just tempting me 
No one can touch it
But the tallest giants in this broken society 
Forbidden fruit is the ripest fruit
Perfectly grown and soft
It's skin like satin 
No mare to be seen
If only it would drop down to me
My arms are too short 
My legs just as long 
My fingers just barely reach
It's not fair I say
And I'll say it all day
Until it finally falls off
And drops down to me 

Submitted on 2012-10-01 19:08:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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