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Author: LiveInDreams
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Words: 108
Class/Type: Poetry /Sorry
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Am I leading you on?
Did I do something wrong?
My brain is just too jumbled to think
The heart
My heart
It yearns for another 
But sadly he's untouchable
My body feels comfortable with you
Being around you is nice 
But my hearts just not in it
Though now I'm too far under 
To pull my hook out 
What should I do?
Should I keep going on 
Or tell you the truth?
Somehow I feel this is unfair to you 
But I'm not the only one to blame
Your emotions overwhelm me
Your touch is uncomfortable 
I just don't know how to tell you
I'm sorry...

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