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    dots Submission Name: Leading dots
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    Author: LiveInDreams
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 3/6/8
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    dotsLeading dots
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    Am I leading you on?
    Did I do something wrong?
    My brain is just too jumbled to think
    The heart
    My heart
    It yearns for another 
    But sadly he's untouchable
    Unreachable
    My body feels comfortable with you
    Being around you is nice 
    But my hearts just not in it
    Though now I'm too far under 
    To pull my hook out 
    What should I do?
    Should I keep going on 
    Or tell you the truth?
    Somehow I feel this is unfair to you 
    But I'm not the only one to blame
    Your emotions overwhelm me
    Your touch is uncomfortable 
    I just don't know how to tell you
    I'm sorry...




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