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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Come to my wall, call me out of the crowd
    Let your coat fall away, let flesh fade to clear
    Let bone disappear as I tune my ear to thoughts 
    I might hear in the space between words.

    Come to my window, raise the glazed frame
    Find me inside and whisper my name
    Bring out your guitar, sing a sweet serenade
    Strum it and play in the space between words.

    In the space between words, everything's soundless.
    Fearless and boundless, the voiceless are heard.
    Come to my fountain.  Sit close to the edge.
    Dip your hand in the water and stir. 




    Submitted on 2012-10-01 23:41:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My skull is quite ossified you would need a
    large mallet I think to make a soft spot. However
    I still have one or two soft spots left in my heart.
    In point of fact my heart seems to be somewhat less
    durable these days.
    Isn't that just like a man though! The older he gets
    the harder his head.

    Well if I have not lost you yet? I must admit
    this poem is a bit like a soft serenade a melody
    of ripe verse riff with a mellow golden after-flow.

    I don't know if I was suppose to but at the end there
    I swear I caught a glimpse of you in your bath
    sprinkled with rose petals.
    | Posted on 2012-10-06 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. It's good to see this format be used again. I used to write a lot like this. The only thing I don't like is this line: Find me inside and whisper my name. It rhymes although the other don't and it's also too short and kinda ruins the format of the poem. I think you should change it maybe only the last part so it doesn't rhyme and it's a bit longer...
    | Posted on 2012-10-03 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with you and Jacob there is a lot to be heard in the space between words. The more you think of it the endless amount of ideas and situations where you clearly see and hear it. Somewhere, your mind can run free with imagination of w/e the topic. I prefer myself small simple poems that have the ability to become complex and different for those who read and create their own definitions. Very nice read :-)
    Anthony
    | Posted on 2012-10-02 00:00:00 | by Kersofmia | [ Reply to This ]
      this is almost eerie...the haunting sounds in between the words that not everyone hears.

    there is that space...and the thought of what could be in between, or what could be placed in between.

    often times it is what is not said that is actually more powerful than what is...

    like in short poems, where there is so much space for interpretation...not everything is said...
    the imagination gets to play...

    "come to my fountain/ sit by the edge/ dip your hand and stir"

    see what appears when you create some current.

    really like this write.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-10-01 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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