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    dots Submission Name: Silent Chanteydots
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    Author: unknownguest
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 6/12/18
    Words: 32
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsSilent Chanteydots
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    lone days
    lone hours
    lone girl

    dinned

    self-entertainment
    aloof, alienated

    each second

    somehow, slowly,
    mutilated

    singing
    hand-me-down songs,

    mirroring mother;

    in the empire of wrongs




    Submitted on 2012-10-02 10:01:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this... I think it describes a lot of people. The outcasts, ya know? Good work, it paints a nice mental picture.
    | Posted on 2012-10-08 00:00:00 | by Undead37 | [ Reply to This ]
      reminds me of sylvia plath and her mother...too much alike...with all the pain sylvia suffered, her mother couldn't reach her...and sometimes seemed to not want to listen...because she was too close, sylvia mirrored her mother.

    and when the mother has messed up, often it is passed on to the daughter...

    if only the trend could be broken...

    this sound of this, the song of this is so sad.

    i like the use of "chantey" and "dinned"

    perfect wording.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-10-02 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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