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    dots Submission Name: Haiku sandots

    Author: Paradox
    ASL Info:    33/m/Earthbound
    Elite Ratio:    4.58 - 1055/434/90
    Words: 15
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHaiku sandots

    the snake eats slowly
    the other green snake as if
    eating its own tail

    Submitted on 2012-10-03 11:18:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This made me smile :)
    | Posted on 2016-10-20 00:00:00 | by ShadowParadox | [ Reply to This ]
      You make me wish that I 'got' Haiku.

    Ouroboros, that's one I had to google--well worth the jaunt, I assure you.

    Reminds me of a youtube I once saw where the snake was eating himself and he was bloody and gross and you kept thinking, "Oh. My. God. Just stop. Are you stupid?" But he just kept gnawing...

    The other snake, doing the eating, are we dealing with a cannibalistic theme? Metaphorically, of course. Just wondering.

    Do stop in at my page and read my new bit--I sure could use some sound advice.

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    | Posted on 2013-02-19 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]
    | Posted on 2012-11-24 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      I like sushi too.
    | Posted on 2012-11-08 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this. I can't offer any suggestions, because I would not change anything.
    | Posted on 2012-10-14 00:00:00 | by nursekiller | [ Reply to This ]
      The figure of the ouroboros is most haunting for me and, it seems, for all humanity since it recurs in everywhere from Plato to the Vedas to Coleridge like an inherent part of the collective unconscious, and the haiku is a most potent form, perfect place for the beast to reside in. Good execution.
    | Posted on 2012-10-08 00:00:00 | by Snow9 | [ Reply to This ]
      An allusion to Ouroboros, eh? Nice. :3
    | Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      this one is written to make you think.. and I'm thinking now..goof exercise though.
    | Posted on 2012-10-04 00:00:00 | by ladyinredheels | [ Reply to This ]
      very cool.

    | Posted on 2012-10-03 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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