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    dots Submission Name: Maternal death after the second twin dots
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    Author: Dead Bell
    ASL Info:    23/m/Ire
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 48/129/125
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMaternal death after the second twin dots
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    The baby born in blood
    Has made his mothers heart explode
    He will be the wrong angel

    Apollo has cursed your house
    Now just hallow dignity
    Her body stretched upon the ekkyklÍma

    That still he lives to be scorned
    By the better half
    The angel that pursued her beauty to her bed

    Her milk is gall so what will we make of you?
    What did you see in your clairvoyance?
    Will you be king?

    You will understand all truths
    You will devour pity and sorrow
    You will be a true human being

    Born through the palpitating pain
    You will be feared by them
    You will inspire them to walk away

    Let you bathe in any joy thatís offered
    May you dream in peace from watering eyes and
    Let you not be bloody now





    Submitted on 2012-10-04 16:58:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I swear that after reading the first couple of lines, I envisioned the movie The Unborn, which scared the bejeezus out of me when I watched it. But I digress.

    I really liked the third line on the third stanza;
    "The angel that pursued her beauty to her bed."
    It took me a couple of times of repeating it to make sure I read it correctly, and while I'm not sure my interpretation of it is correct, I like it all the same.
    | Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by mxadrienne | [ Reply to This ]


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