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    dots Submission Name: Moments of Lovedots

    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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       the pains of forbidden love

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    dotsMoments of Lovedots

    catching your gazes at me
    and the other way around

    a secret smile shared
    when nothing seems sound

    brushing as we stand
    under the table, held my hand

    we shouldn't kiss,
    we shouldn't hug;

    so they tell us

    but I'll always keep
    these moments of our love

    Submitted on 2012-10-05 20:36:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Woah, written as if you could see into my heart. This was just vague enough for others to relate; and it was detailed enough to paint a vivid picture for the reader. Thank you for sharing! I almost cried as it compelled me to reminisce on my own experiences. Bravo
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    | Posted on 2013-03-24 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      i hope everything works out well.brings back fond memories long gone. simple yet complicated, i like it
    | Posted on 2012-11-30 00:00:00 | by nosferotu_gurl | [ Reply to This ]
      This forbidden love is so intriguing. Also very romantic
    but not knowing all the details (I so want to know)
    all I can advise is guard your heart and try not to turn
    it into an obsession because those never seem to end
    | Posted on 2012-10-06 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      this brought me back many years to a certain incident...what we couldn't do but wanted to---eventually we passed on the moment knowing it was best. But the feeling was mutual, the intensity there, the unacted upon chemistry that was knowing look, a feeling, a what if....

    better left alone, but at the same time, frustrating to let it get away.

    the one thing is, no one would ever know, except us.

    | Posted on 2012-10-06 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      i smiled while reading this ;) its all too familiar, that horrible yet exciting restraint. this is a lovely simple write yet it holds the complexity of feelings. nice one my friend :D
    | Posted on 2012-10-05 00:00:00 | by simpleandgreen | [ Reply to This ]
      hiding your love from the world is painful
    not being able to freely show affection sends a fire of yearning in our hearts

    nice write
    | Posted on 2012-10-05 00:00:00 | by sandy26 | [ Reply to This ]

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