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    dots Submission Name: My Knight in the Nightdots

    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsMy Knight in the Nightdots

    The moon sought my soul
    in the echoes of the night

    With each syllable brought
    a thumping to my dead heart

    Enclosed in four walls of a room
    with closed door & an open window

    looking out, I saw

    A knight,
    in dark, moonbeamed armor

    I rode along his mighty steed
    Cantering upon the rutted roads ahead

    He does not speak a word
    but words do echo in the eventide’s end

    tracing haven in every meter we put away

    Oh the many ‘iloveyou’s’
    I could not push away from my mouth

    A love that filled the cracks of a broken heart

    He rides the hour in midnight’s cloak
    his glow, an effulgence I never knew I sought

    Drifting back and forth
    with renewed heart thrumming

    This dream,
    only I will be seeking

    A love to fill my very being

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      Wow, I really enjoyed this one, it's very whimsical and romantic in the best kind of ways. Mysterious and sudden, adventurous and yet so easy, to just ride away on the perfection of forever to be loved. I found myself with a smile by the end which is rare and great to find yourself, thank you for this great piece and hope you keep riding and eventually find that lovely knight of yours.
    | Posted on 2012-10-08 00:00:00 | by Shadow_Mirror | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing, I love your poetic style and your overall flow is wonderful. Thank you for sharing
    | Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very romantic for me and there are lines (a lot for me to list) that really caught me.
    | Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by sandy26 | [ Reply to This ]
      A knight in shining armor? :) Do girls really even think about this kind of stuff anymore? Anyway, the poem is decent, although I'm not sure about the format.
    | Posted on 2012-10-06 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      This is quite possibly the perfect romantic poem.
    I am going to steal moonbeamed armor.
    "The many Iloveyous I could not push away from
    my mouth."
    I am addicted to poetry so I have a very
    high tolerance to even the most exquisite lines of verse.
    In fact I mainline lines to stay alive
    However the pure thrill of
    That line almost stopped my heart.
    | Posted on 2012-10-06 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]

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