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    dots Submission Name: Sapphiredots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 464
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       Missing the forest, my home in the southern visayas.


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    dotsSapphiredots
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    A blue rose,
    amidst the shadows of mahoganys
    bound to the mountains,
    of Visayas,
    land of emeralds.

    I see the widest green there,
    where children run,
    blocking the sun,
    with kites roaming high.
    In chicken, eagle and boat shapes,
    Oh, everything can fly.

    I remember home,

    home,
    and sliding down the hill,
    laughter echoes as I flipped,
    upside down.
    My heart beats just to remember.

    So a place where roses grow,
    with indiferrent hues.

    I am blue,
    and emerald is home.





    Submitted on 2012-10-06 10:24:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I haven't left my hometown but I never pictured it like this..this is beautiful te..made me appreciate this city in a new way..though I haven't been to Bontoc at all,, is it much greener there?..perhaps it is, compared to Maasin..hmm I am now left wondering!
    | Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]
      I hail from Philippine soil as well, and this piece made me nothing short of homesick. And whilst I've never been in the Visayas, I can easily picture the beaches, which will probably fail in comparison to your slice of paradise, around Batangas where I stay.
    | Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by mxadrienne | [ Reply to This ]
      I have been googling your islands, not only am I jealous
    I mean you really do come from paradise.
    I am already planing my next vacation and it
    will be in the Visayas. If it is as wonderful as I think
    it will be I don't doubt I shall retire there someday.
    | Posted on 2012-10-06 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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