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    dots Submission Name: 'Were I to try and count them...'dots
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    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254/389/301
    Words: 21
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 568
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    Bytes: 157



    Description:
       A magnetic poem, made with Magnetic Poetry's nature kit.

    Ps. 139:17,18 - "So, to me how precious your thoughts are! O God, how much does the grand sum of them amount to! Were I to try to count them, they are more than even the grains of sand. I have awaked, and yet I am still with you."


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    Ancient insect,
    sing your night song!
    Use long murmurs and
    bright earth breezes!

    See, He has more secrets
    for you.




    Submitted on 2012-10-06 11:52:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      if only we could understand what he was saying...be interesting to know those secrets.
    | Posted on 2012-10-06 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one as well but the second line doesn't really work. You should change it into something like: sing your night song, or something like that...
    | Posted on 2012-10-06 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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