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A Song in My Life

Author: irrelevantme
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Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Friendship
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for my bestfriend .. I miss her so much

A Song in My Life

brought together by a movie,
bond strengthened by song
seatmates, friends, sometimes enemies
understanding, accepting
imperfections & wrongs

alike but never the same
at times crazy, sometimes sane
walked with me
through the halls of high school
knew every worry and 'kilig'

not a day went that we don't share,
duets when the teacher isn't there
we sing every chance we got,
Music? Oh we love it a lot!

now, we have surpassed
those familiar halls;
new one's we now take

here, and an airtravel away,

but still, 'til now
we sing together everyday

Submitted on 2012-10-07 03:43:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i really like the wording in this, it's nostalgic...

only problem lies in the tenses...lots of switching of present and is a bit distracting, but can easily be remedied by changing some of the verbs to make it consistent.

i had a best friend, we used to sing together at work...harmonize...some said we sounded pretty good...this reminded me of her...

we lost her about 4 yeas ago...way too soon..such a sweetie...

but good memories evoked by this.

| Posted on 2012-10-22 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
  It seems you are an incurable romantic. :) Not exactly my cup of tea but I appreciate the word flow. You really have good skills.
| Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
  Very nice! I used to write for my friends too, always before. I love the word "kilig" by the way. Ah! I remember these times, all the way to hig hschool. Thanks for sharing,this bring back memories, good ones.;-)
| Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]

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