A Song in My Life

Author: irrelevantme Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83 /89 /62 Words: 99

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A Song in My Life

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brought together by a movie, bond strengthened by song seatmates, friends, sometimes enemies understanding, accepting imperfections & wrongs alike but never the same at times crazy, sometimes sane walked with me through the halls of high school knew every worry and 'kilig' not a day went that we don't share, duets when the teacher isn't there we sing every chance we got, Music? Oh we love it a lot! now, we have surpassed those familiar halls; new one's we now take here, and an airtravel away, but still, 'til now we sing together everyday

Submitted on 2012-10-07 03:43:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i really like the wording in this, it's nostalgic... only problem lies in the tenses...lots of switching of present and past...it is a bit distracting, but can easily be remedied by changing some of the verbs to make it consistent. i had a best friend, we used to sing together at work...harmonize...some said we sounded pretty good...this reminded me of her... we lost her about 4 yeas ago...way too soon..such a sweetie... but good memories evoked by this. jacob

| Posted on 2012-10-22 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

It seems you are an incurable romantic. :) Not exactly my cup of tea but I appreciate the word flow. You really have good skills.

| Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]

Very nice! I used to write for my friends too, always before. I love the word "kilig" by the way. Ah! I remember these times, all the way to hig hschool. Thanks for sharing,this bring back memories, good ones.;-)

| Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]

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