This site will self destruct in 2 months, March 17.
It will come back, and be familiar and at the same time completely different.
All content will be deleted. Backup anything important.
--- Staff
Roleplay Cloud -

Sign up to EliteSkills

Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

An Attempt to Kick One's Own Butt

Author: Snow9
Elite Ratio:    3 - 38 /21 /17
Words: 101
Class/Type: Joke /Satire
Total Views: 2096
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 810


A private joke, fear it being too eccentric. Somehow a train always becomes my site of production.

An Attempt to Kick One's Own Butt

Camus in my head,
Murakami in my heart,
Dedalian wings,
And Blake everywhere
"I'm a disco dancer"-
My feet are miles below.
(Wait a sec... um, minute,
Let my journey feel their tip....
Ah, yes.)
So extensive is the human body!
But where-from did Snow come?
And then the ouroboros.
And what if it, self-consuming,
Doesn't grow?

Literary gimmicks,
That's all. We never grow.
But defragmenting
With increasing entropy.

"Pray, when did you last see a flower sir?"
There's a... leaf beneath the front seat.
Don't know the name.
Will wiki it up
Once my journey reaches destination.

Submitted on 2012-10-07 07:49:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!


  love the second stanza...would change "defragmenting" to "defragment"

but yes, we are defragmenting in a way--we are becoming a life stored in bytes...

computerized...when was the last time we danced, on an actual dance floor...that we played games that involve physical activity..rather than looking at a computer screen...

this poem makes me want to go out and play...

that leaf beneath the seat....nice touch..

my girlfriend is always saying to me..."look it up"

ahhhhh wikipedia...

i want to go on there and change all the definitions to something totally absurd.

are poets just literary gimmicks now?

no heart? maybe maybe

| Posted on 2012-10-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
  Dunno about snow but if you really wanna know where the ouroboros came from check out my latest haiku. :)
| Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
  Well, I like it. The first three lines are great. The title is really interesting.
| Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?