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    Author: unwantedlove20
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 16/12/11
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       Just a brief description of what I go through ..


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    dotsDid you know ?dots
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    She smiles at everyone
    Strangers included
    She'll instantly be your best friend
    Yet at home , she's excluded

    She wants everyone to be happy
    And won't stop trying until she succeeds
    But late at night while her parents sleep
    She watches as her wrists bleed

    Did you know ,
    That she cries herself to sleep at night
    She tries to be happy
    But she's exhausted from the fight

    Did you know ,
    She doesn't want to live this way
    With a constant pain in her heart
    That she knows is there to stay

    Did you know ,
    She puts on a show all the time
    She's breaking down inside
    She just wants real love
    Is that such a crime

    Did you know ,
    That the keyboard is all blurred
    That's she's writing this and crying
    While her '' friends '' watched but didn't stir ?

    She's tired of this masquerade
    Take her mask off and you'll see
    That the girl that's ready to give up
    Is really me ...




    Submitted on 2012-10-08 21:16:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a good write it flows well and pulls the reader in to your world. Maybe I'm a little bias on it pulling the reader in though because I can relate well to this piece. This is exactly how I used to feel all the time and how I still do alot of the time though it has gotten better in time since I have been out on my own. I know it seems like you don't want to make it now and I understand if you don't believe this because I didn't back then either but it does get better not to say life becomes perfect because it never does but in time you learn how to cope better and for me once I moved out i felt like I had a little more controle over my life which helps. I'm watching my lil sis go through this now, so your not alone maybe try to find someone who is going through the same thing you may be able to help eachother. Anyway great piece and keep writing.
    S.A.M.
    | Posted on 2012-10-20 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]
      This honestly feels like what I go through, as well as many others. It's seems that there's no cure for it and that it will never get better, but it will. Poetry helps with it a lot so just keep on writing and I hope everything turns out okay. If you're strong enough to make it this far, then you're strong enough to make it to the end.
    | Posted on 2012-10-12 00:00:00 | by LiveInDreams | [ Reply to This ]


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