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Hernia


Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.94 - 139 /256 /171
Words: 26
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Hernia



Painkillers, poetry, your voice -
That reassure me in whispers;
I miss, I don’t - - I hit and miss
Kneel down Life, my sister.




Submitted on 2012-10-09 16:17:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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