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Author:	eggshells
ASL Info:	23/M/WA
Elite Ratio:	3.19 - 29/75/68
Words:	122

Class/Type:	Poetry/Comedy
Total Views:	758
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Real I Say Shun dots

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If only you could see
That it's not me
You're fighting for.

If only they could breathe
The toxins that we leave
From this war.

It's all been done before.

Prisons bringing a pretty penny.
Societies formed around killing the petty.
It seems morals are tossed.

Can't seem to change the many.
Leader's choices all uncanny.
We are lost.

And we can't even see what it's cost.

Our origins are unknown.
Our population has overgrown.
We don't know what to do.

Time is on loan.
Can't reach God on the phone.
It seems like we might be screwed.

If only we listened to that bearded dude.

Submitted on 2012-10-09 18:25:20 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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"It's all been done before."

Nope!

And that idea is a big part of the problem. Nothing like this, on this scale, ever happened before. There are freaking robots flying in the sky right now killing people!!! When has something like this ever happened?!?
| Posted on 2012-10-10 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
nice rhyme scheme in this...so subtle i almost missed it...i like that...can't stand sing-songy rhyme.

also agree with the philosophy of the piece..

we are destroying ourselves...i am not sure i want to be around in 20 years...

i like the heart in this...

jacob
| Posted on 2012-10-09 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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