I find this piece interesting. It has a lot of words such as "busstop poetry" that are put together in unconventional ways and display an ability to fashion something highly unique and meaningful. Furthermore, I can sense a metaphor emerging that I would like to see developed in more detail. I have no problem with short poems, but this one feels like it could and should be expanded upon to have a full impact on the reader as to the subject. Honestly though, great job! Keep up the good work!