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    dots Submission Name: Indiscretionsdots
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    Author: Raistlin Sith
    ASL Info:    22/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 106/182/66
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 844
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    Bytes: 1272



    Description:
       inspired by an article I read.


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    dotsIndiscretionsdots
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    i cannot replace the thrill
    of cloak and dagger love,
    can't go back to simple times
    since she fell from above

    with all those pretty words
    and the attention that I need.
    I wasn't ready for the fear
    and panic it would breed.

    always watchful of my phone,
    terrified i might be caught
    and scared to fight the battle that
    could render everything for naught.

    i didn't know i'd feel so sick
    at my potential to betray,
    never thought i'd be the one
    to violate her trust this way.

    if i would have said all of this
    to myself at a younger age
    the teenage me would slap my face
    he'd be in such a fucking rage.

    how could I be so selfish?
    when did I become this cold?
    when did I lose sight of things
    and let my sense of morals fold?

    i'm so burdened by these secrets
    and this growing web of lies,
    I wish that I could let them out
    and take off this disguise.

    I'm sick of seeming normal
    when I'm screaming out inside,
    why did I not realize
    that we all crash in this ride?




    Submitted on 2012-10-11 23:43:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very nice, I enjoyed the simplicity and shortness of the lines.
    It creates a kind of desperation effect.
    I believe every man would have these feelings one time or another involved in an affair.

    I don't like all compliments so I will tell you that somehow while reading I felt the 5th stanza stumbles through.
    It just doesn't have the flow of the rest for me.



    thank you for sharing
    LCL
    | Posted on 2012-10-19 00:00:00 | by Localfreak | [ Reply to This ]
      This almost sounds like it could be a song; it's so lyrical and deep. Good job :)
    | Posted on 2012-10-12 00:00:00 | by LiveInDreams | [ Reply to This ]


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