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    dots Submission Name: abstractdots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    He drove for miles to buy roses,
    to be condensed in intrinsic form.

    She was standing graciously by the doorway,
    spiritless,inept and of the wrong age.

    From time to time, alternate notes,
    would swing by,
    halting the changes of sky's hues
    for the owls to investigate.

    When all has been said and done,
    there's still the hope of anticipation,
    or did the flowers beat him off to sleep?

    For miles and miles, the scent wanes,
    competing against the air,
    they never came.

    Two moon appeared by the door,
    She was still waiting,
    as the words go.




    Submitted on 2012-10-12 02:28:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This poor girl I feel so sad for her.
    She needs a good book to read.
    I bet if she got a new laptop she could
    download a good book and she would have
    something to do while she waits for this
    Jerk to show up with her flowers.
    She could even go on youtube and watch
    all of Pitbull's videos. I bet that would give her
    some fresh spirit.

    | Posted on 2012-10-13 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      This is personal but I like this. If I were you, I won't wait too long.
    This is a good piece, going to check out more of yours.

    Cheers,
    Tom
    | Posted on 2012-10-12 00:00:00 | by quicksorrow | [ Reply to This ]


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