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    dots Submission Name: Cut the Crap Mandots
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    Author: quicksorrow
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 33/9/8
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsCut the Crap Mandots
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    I love you!
    I love you!
    I love you!

    Shouts!

    As he was doing her, front to back and side by side.
    slow and fast, everything is,
    Bang! Bang! Bang!
    She took a grip of his hair, like crunching leaves,
    pulling hard the heralds of the night died.
    After the last switch, the caterpillars howl
    When morn came butterflies flee,
    taking him with them.

    I love you!
    I love you!
    I love you!

    shouts before the fuck.




    Submitted on 2012-10-12 03:48:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      but he didn't really love her...except for the night...

    and she is left...a flower violated and left to face the sun of the morning with a certain sadness...

    meanwhile he flutters off to another with the very same "i love you's"

    to make his conquest...

    too bad the cocoon wasn't sprayed with insecticide...

    it all happens so fast, in the heat of the moment...and the regrets make the wings feel so heavy.

    an absorbing write...i kept going back to this...and finally was able to sum up a reaction.
    i like when a poem keeps me coming back.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-10-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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