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    dots Submission Name: If A Tree Falls Softly dots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsIf A Tree Falls Softly dots
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                        Somewhere beyond wisdom
                        lurking in the forest of the mind
                        a tiger crouches on an ancient game trail.
                        This stalking wraith of primeval memory
                        is a flitting phantom that blends into our
                        modern imagination.

                        Still beneath the elder growths structured lair,
                        light filters through in puzzle pieces.
                        Clues are left as dappled bits of imagery
                        on sun flecked fern and vine.

                        There for study every intersecting intricacy
                        remains as an olden runic tracery
                        in coded bits of lore.
                        Somewhere in this elusive archive
                        the intrepid soul may find
                        that the answers are just questions
                        quantumly tangled with the mind.




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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really beautiful, thanks.
    I do tend to want to flip your "that the answers are just questions" (even though it may be true that all answers just lead to more questions). It could also be "that the questions are just answers". But if they are truly tangled, either way is as good as the other. ;)

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2012-10-20 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm going to borrow this one for my fave list if you don't mind. I've come back to read it numerous times and it's become quantumly tangled in my mind. Makes me think of Blake's Tiger.


    A couple of minor punctuation issues:

    apostrophe s and comma here:
    Still beneath the elder growth's structured lair,

    and here the semicolon is inappropriate after 'find'

    the intrepid soul may find
    that the answers are just questions
    quantumly tangled with the mind.



    Nice write, thanks!
    | Posted on 2012-10-19 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]


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