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    dots Submission Name: Tailored Touchdots
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    Author: rubie
    Elite Ratio:    7.03 - 177/68/17
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTailored Touchdots
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    Rip my stitches out
    Pull with all your might

    I won't be mended
    I won't be altered
    I won't be tailored
    To suit your needs

    I'm a custom-made garment
    So toss aside my mannequin heart
    And measure out your love
    So that it's a perfect fit for me




    Submitted on 2012-10-13 20:14:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem suits me just fine.

    i like the strength of the speaker.

    there is the idea of love being the right fit for her, not that she has to alter herself to fit with him.
    we hope to all feel custom made...we are all different, with different needs and wants....and with the right significant other can sew a love that might last a lifetime..even if the clothes of each clash a bit...
    as long as they wear well, that is good.

    those stitiches are pretty damn strong.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-10-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I dunno. You're kinda expecting too much from your partner. If you got deep wounds, you're the only one who can heal them...
    | Posted on 2012-10-14 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know this way sounds way too harsh.
    What is a mannequin heart? It sounds cold blooded.
    I have never bought anything custom tailored.
    You are not convincing me to change with this line that is for sure. I will stick to loose and off the rack.
    | Posted on 2012-10-13 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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