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    dots Submission Name: Once upon a timedots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsOnce upon a timedots
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    Once upon a time
    in a land
    very far away
    a land where
    the sun has collapsed just this side of forever
    to spill a delicate cloud-work of amber liqueurs
    on an already inebriating sky.

    The forest reaches out to play with the sea.
    A sense of vast longing hangs in the breeze.
    And a Jungle Princess languishes in sliver
    chains, waiting absolutely alone.

    She has become the essence of waiting.
    Two moons have passed and she abides.
    I wish I could sing a song to comfort her
    a softly crooned lullaby might get her to
    close those weary eyes and rest safe in
    my nightmare proof arms.

    Sometimes I think I only dream of her.
    There could never be a real princess
    languishing in a real jungle.

    Outside my window the real sky is filled with
    Thor's wrath. The sky has vomited forth
    a torrent that threatens to wash away my
    truck. But in my true heart?

    I have always loved the jungle.
    And the Princess is not only real, if
    I listen very quietly I can hear her
    dream.






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      This is my favorite thing I have read here. Thank you for writing it. I will read it often.
    | Posted on 2012-11-03 00:00:00 | by EmptyBox | [ Reply to This ]
      "Once upon a time
    in a land
    so far away.."

    Every rose you see,
    is a princess,
    in bloom.
    When she is flourishing,
    in deep scarlet buds,
    with leaves downbeats
    of callow breeze,
    a moon creature came.
    that failed to pluck it,
    and gave her a tiara instead.

    I can't still get enough with "night proof arms" its a great line.
    | Posted on 2012-10-15 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      Who is that chick? You keep posting pictures of her.
    | Posted on 2012-10-14 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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