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Watch the world


Author: Themissingshado
ASL Info:    22/male/Seattle
Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 23 /52 /32
Words: 62
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Watch the world



Dust
Blowing in the breeze
Tides
Ebb and flow
The moon
Chasing the sun
the chill of winter on your lips
The stars
Piercing the darkness
as seconds turn to years
Moments are forgotten
I'll remember for the both of us
Dont worry you'll be fine
until your time is over too
I'll watch this world from high.





Submitted on 2012-10-14 02:12:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "i'll remember for the both of us"

nice line...

this piece is simple, yet beautiful...

could be speaking of a higher deity watching over us...telling us to just live the life each days, don't dwell on what was before, the deity will remember and remind us at the end...our job is just to enjoy each sunset, moonbeam, love and challenge we will face each day---

as Scarlett said, "afterall, tomorrow is another day"

jacob
| Posted on 2012-10-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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