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    dots Submission Name: Watch the worlddots
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    Author: Themissingshado
    ASL Info:    22/male/Seattle
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 23/52/32
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsWatch the worlddots
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    Dust
    Blowing in the breeze
    Tides
    Ebb and flow
    The moon
    Chasing the sun
    the chill of winter on your lips
    The stars
    Piercing the darkness
    as seconds turn to years
    Moments are forgotten
    I'll remember for the both of us
    Dont worry you'll be fine
    until your time is over too
    I'll watch this world from high.





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      "i'll remember for the both of us"

    nice line...

    this piece is simple, yet beautiful...

    could be speaking of a higher deity watching over us...telling us to just live the life each days, don't dwell on what was before, the deity will remember and remind us at the end...our job is just to enjoy each sunset, moonbeam, love and challenge we will face each day---

    as Scarlett said, "afterall, tomorrow is another day"

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-10-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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