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    dots Submission Name: Painting picturesdots
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    Author: Fie
    Elite Ratio:    0.01 - 0/2/1
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 614
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    dotsPainting picturesdots
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    He's wearing the mask
    the mask wears him
    tears him
    becomes him
    tells a different story of him
    than what is him
    truly
    now where is he?

    Is it the mirror that lies?
    his own eyes?
    identity becomes polluted
    changes to become what
    might be more suited

    She paints a selfportrait
    correct as she ought to be
    fought to be
    was taught to be
    but who would she be
    really
    now where is she?

    Is it the mirror that lies?
    her own eyes?
    identity becomes polluted
    changes to become what
    might be more suited




    Submitted on 2012-10-14 07:08:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      F*ck paradox. I got the rhyme scheme, it wasn't the last words you were trying ti rhyme with. That said, i unfortunately did not understand the actual meaning. Not sure what you were trying to get at. Keep working at it though. You have plenty of potential.
    | Posted on 2012-10-15 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      I dunno. I don't really like the rhyming scheme used. You can't really rhyme a word with itself...
    | Posted on 2012-10-14 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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