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the quiet dream

Author: Clayman
ASL Info:    28 - getting late
Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609 /327 /167
Words: 57
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Misc
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the quiet dream

Life is a bass ride with a
pocket full of knives,
a hopscotch gallery of
ambrosia and misshapen
offerings presented
in fluid movement.

I would do it all again
before the pass of a blink
or the shimmer of a heart
knowing my path is
understood and
predetermined to end
at your feet.


Submitted on 2012-10-14 16:09:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  What is a bass ride? I'm not sure I understand that part...
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