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    dots Submission Name: the quiet dreamdots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsthe quiet dreamdots
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    Life is a bass ride with a
    pocket full of knives,
    a hopscotch gallery of
    ambrosia and misshapen
    offerings presented
    in fluid movement.

    I would do it all again
    before the pass of a blink
    or the shimmer of a heart
    expires,
    knowing my path is
    understood and
    predetermined to end
    at your feet.

    Svw




    Submitted on 2012-10-14 16:09:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What is a bass ride? I'm not sure I understand that part...
    | Posted on 2012-10-14 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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