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    dots Submission Name: Awakeningdots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAwakeningdots
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    By way of a footbridge we crossed a sea,
    as a flock of butterflies would soar the sky.
    A dream-memory, fulfilled in astounding words,
    like a pale flower crumbling over
    a coarse scar.

    We made it through the water's edge,
    at the end of things, more dense,
    more intrusive than vulnerability.
    And waved our flags to the seasons,
    only to be lured by a beguiling seashore,
    of love's barbed wires wrapped in,
    silver tarnish and glows into a lump
    of dreams compressed into morn.

    In between waters, sea bed and horizon,
    our steps turned to footprints and the page
    goes white.











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    of love's barbed wires wrapped in,
    silver tarnish and glows into a lump
    of dreams compressed into morn.

    these were really good lines, the imagery is superb. I hate to compliment you this much and not offer any constructive help but this really captured me. you're style is great. It will really mean a lot if you check my work.

    Tom

    | Posted on 2012-10-18 00:00:00 | by quicksorrow | [ Reply to This ]
      I crossed the sea by the narrow path
    With an eye ever wary of looming storm
    On the way I met a metaphor named astonish
    And we became a dream wrapped in an orchid with wings

    We drank deep of heavy words and discovered
    Gravity can sometimes compress a momentary
    Infatuation with glowing coals into diamond and gold
    | Posted on 2012-10-18 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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