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    dots Submission Name: Thieves of ciphersdots

    Author: Jimi James
    ASL Info:    24/m/somehwere
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 90/78/41
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       how i write poems. or just anything.
    title suggests something, but too tired to further develop stuff

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThieves of ciphersdots

    There's blood veining,
    throughout this thought,
    cutting into a bend,
    seemingly so easy,
    to give a hush its hoot.

    But then,
    talk of ciphers,
    songs of tedium;
    the joyful jeers
    shake the knees
    of indulgent thieves.

    I stand amongst them,
    clustering wayward words
    awaiting glued genius;
    tricked laud
    makes me unlearn my deceit.
    A change in originality
    is the worst chicanery,
    a change in originality
    which self-deception?

    Submitted on 2012-10-17 20:15:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Disjointed. Makes no sense. Says nothing. Tells me nothing. Scattered random thoughts which lead nowhere.
    | Posted on 2013-01-18 00:00:00 | by C. Starr | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not good enough to start telling other people how to write. But if you want to know what I thought, I liked the middle and ending but not the beginning. It was like, everything else I've read. But I don't like anything to do with cutting. Cutting bores me. But then again, I write everything else I ever read, too I guess :( How can you not?

    But if you want to rip, I am open to hear something cuz I want to write better. Anyway. I wish I knew more so I could do something scathing :)
    | Posted on 2012-12-09 00:00:00 | by EmptyBox | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi, please disregard my first comment on this poem. It wasn't totally honest as it was in response to the comment you left on the poem [A Butterfly {Chained} by TangledInDreams. Please read my second comment there to understand this situation. You can find that poem here: http://www.eliteskills.com/z/196397

    I am better than this, so please take my sincere apology for my first comment here. Jimi, you should understand that comments don't work this way here. You should always try to offer your honest opinion but never make it personal. You just had the bad luck of getting comments from some of the worst people on this site. Now, you are influenced by them. You should try to shake that off. I know it's not that easy, I almost went on the same path here. But we should end this now. Please offer your apologies to TangledInDreams like I did right now and never post something like that again...
    | Posted on 2012-11-06 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      If you are too lazy to develop thoughts, maybe you shouldn't write them down? Just an advice...
    | Posted on 2012-11-06 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]

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