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    dots Submission Name: Mundanedots
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    Author: simpleandgreen
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 39/141/136
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMundanedots
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    I can see the brilliant, lumiscent light of the future through eyes cracked open.
    Oh wait, it's just that desk lamp I forgot to turn off.
    I can feel the deepest love brewing in the pit of my stomach.
    Oh wait, I'm just hungry.
    I can see the world in all its vibrant colors and spectacular wonders.
    Oh wait, I'm just high.
    I can feel my brain churning as brilliant ideas are being synthesized.
    Oh wait, it's just a migraine.




    Submitted on 2012-10-17 22:13:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This one is very true, on of the greatest anxieties an artistic mind can experience- the ideal being continuously frustrated by the real. Sadly we are all grounded to the earth, and worse still, even if the author be truly having his/her "brain churning as brilliant ideas are being synthesized", other idiots who might dismiss it as a "migraine" are more likely to be believed.

    Your piece is excitingly ironic and very sad, it cuts both ways.
    | Posted on 2012-10-24 00:00:00 | by Snow9 | [ Reply to This ]
      Now this is very good. Just what I needed to bring me down a bit from my current state of mania.
    | Posted on 2012-10-19 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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