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    dots Submission Name: trembling waterdots

    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotstrembling waterdots

    It isn't that I don't love you,
    I simply don't want to be the woman,
    as brave as you want me to be,
    or as beautiful and kind.

    It isn't that I don't love you,
    I just can't turn words
    to vapor over my head,
    or to simply say, "I love you",
    unprotected and steep.

    You smiled at my cowardice,
    I dreamed of your fearless ways.
    Of ocean wide and unstirred,
    to dream not of drowning,
    only passitivity to speak.

    "I love you",
    and I know a certain reason for its keeping.
    like how I understand the rift of a heart,
    that stood on a cliff's end,
    and knows no refrain.

    Submitted on 2012-10-18 04:08:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      pretty much this just leaves me speechless
    I am man dying of thirst.
    you write like sunlight on sparkling water.
    Right now I want nothing more than to drown
    in you.

    | Posted on 2012-10-21 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, you write so good and straight from the heart. I keep coming back to your page but I don't do the stalking thing. If I had, you'll be the first one I'd stalk. The last stanza stood out for me;

    "I love you",
    and I know a certain reason for its keeping.
    like how I understand the rift of a heart,
    that stood on a cliff's end,
    and knows no refrain.

    Made me want to shout this words, I mean seriously why hold back?

    | Posted on 2012-10-18 00:00:00 | by quicksorrow | [ Reply to This ]

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