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    dots Submission Name: "Happy"dots

    Author: Hazy skies
    ASL Info:    18/M/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 20/51/26
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Broken thoughts erratic and unpredictable
    Unable to think, to know, to understand
    Can’t see the reasons why I’m so consumed
    Don’t know why all I see is you.

    Trapped within my psyche powerless to stop
    And though my mind is taken over…I feel
    The numbness gone for once in my life
    As an emotion floods in What is this?

    What do they call this emotion?
    This floating stupidity this ignorant bliss
    This unstoppable, implausible, reoccurring feeling
    Brought on by such beauty unrestrained

    All that I can call this is what I’m told it is
    This feeling unknown to me
    This addictive feeling that I never want to lose
    This “happiness”

    Submitted on 2012-10-18 06:31:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The poem's title says Happy but for a second I thought the subject was love not happiness especially with this line "This floating stupidity this ignorant bliss "
    I really liked this poem in the POV as happiness = love.
    | Posted on 2012-10-22 00:00:00 | by She Is Insane | [ Reply to This ]
      This one sent me thinking. Happiness is the moment you love life, you connect to solid coordinates outside and hence the "numbness" goes away. All cynicism dissolves at the moment. Others can't comprehend this in you, and dismiss it as childish ignorance. But when you experience it, your notes are less questioning then tat of wonder. I like the transition from the initial intention to escape from "trap" back to normal life, and then the acceptance upon better understanding- 'never want to lose
    This “happiness”.'
    | Posted on 2012-10-22 00:00:00 | by Snow9 | [ Reply to This ]

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