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    dots Submission Name: Waiting for It (second try)dots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/120
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWaiting for It (second try)dots
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    Not like an itch that yearns to be scratched.
         But like the scent of bread rising in the afternoon
              that awakens an appetite and hints 

    at a coming taste of joy.  Not like a fire 
         that consumes, but like an orange - 
              skin peeled away and opened wide, 

    the generosity of its sections, hoping to be shared.  
         It's not hunger to wait for relief, but delight.
              And not relief when relief comes, 
              but headlong abandon.




    Submitted on 2012-10-18 07:22:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A segmented work about segmented fruit and the joy that long delayed relief lures from the tired mind. although there are some who'll advise against living for the advent of a dream deferred, what else is there to wait for?

    Nicely done...
    | Posted on 2012-10-19 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked the first version quite a bit...

    but this has even more smoothness and sharper flavor.
    | Posted on 2012-10-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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