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    dots Submission Name: An Idots

    Author: Iram
    ASL Info:    25/F/from your world
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 50/62/55
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAn Idots

    Once upon a time
    A moment froze up
    Like a crystal around me
    And the world that I see
    Never changed again
    I feel.

    Once upon a time
    There was an I
    That remained but I died
    And never resurrected
    Or may be I forgot
    My rise.

    I was an anyone
    Like we are anyones
    Go, fly high and
    See from the sky
    How alike do we look
    And how do we make
    A snap, whole of we.

    Time has stopped
    I watched its hush
    From above the world
    Everything new
    Is the rain of it
    In the equao drops
    Minutely differed

    In the crystalline reflection
    Of vibrating momentous
    We become anyones
    Or become everyones
    Upto a yardstick
    Upto easily available
    Versions of liberty.

    But freedom is not to shriek
    As a crowd
    Our freedom is not a decay
    In the dark
    Freedom is to smile
    While we fly
    Freedom is to believe
    How we die

    Once upon a time
    A moment became free
    And I ran within it
    Once upon a time
    There was an I
    Among anyones
    Who could write.

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