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    dots Submission Name: Sun Follows the Moondots
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    Author: littledoll20
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Haiku/Nature
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    Description:
       this is my first ever haiku and i learned it since yesterday...please give me some advice or corrections to improve it...well, i'm an open minded person...


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    dotsSun Follows the Moondots
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    There it is again
    sun peeping behind the clouds
    made for perfection

    the crimson rays fade
    falling down to horizon
    darkness defeats light

    colors of twilight
    silence in the green meadows
    moon enslaves the sun




    Submitted on 2012-10-19 01:22:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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