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    dots Submission Name: stupid lovedots

    Author: quicksorrow
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 33/9/8
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsstupid lovedots

    If not for your sleek words
    which forge a star's signature
    on a check to buy me freedom

    I wouldn't have fallen in love
    with you

    dumb chick.

    Submitted on 2012-10-19 18:00:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't think there's a word wasted in this poem. I like it quite a lot actually: the simplicity of parts mixed with the more inventive wording at parts. I like that it's straight up but there's also this entire part left out that we have to guess at- and that's very nice.

    And then I thought: damn if I don't know that feeling- caring about someone when you'd rather not for whatever reason.

    Hey, it's good stuff. And the formatting works really well also.
    | Posted on 2012-10-24 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ]
      Funny (: Good at recognizing everything but love.
    | Posted on 2012-10-24 00:00:00 | by PassingThru | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn! This sounds so intense. So basically you fell in love with someone who is not that great? (well the narrator in the poem) I like how you add dumb chick at the end - like how there is a lot of space between the rest of the poem and that line. It really emphasizes on that last line.
    | Posted on 2012-10-22 00:00:00 | by She Is Insane | [ Reply to This ]

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