Invisible Love

Author: metallichick786 ASL Info:    32/F/Cali Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 78 /85 /52 Words: 102

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Invisible Love

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Dried and weary the petals fall To the ground, no sound at all Leaves burn crimson as they slowly turn The bitter cold leaves me to yearn Autumn winds howl through my soul Time and tragedy takes its toll Frozen tears stream down my face Diminished memories burn to taste Forgotten love, abandoned trust Adoration guised your lust Season mirrors inner pain Hatred boils to a flame Pondering how much I can actually take Clutching my chest while my heart breaks It's time to go, time to move on Leaving this invisible love far behind

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I enjoyed the symbolism here of the season representing the end of the relationship. I think you made it easy for the reader to relate. Nice write. Thanks for sharing.

| Posted on 2012-10-27 00:00:00 | by closetpoet | [ Reply to This ]

Truley amazing piece. Keep digging deep and find the inner self you so long to find.

| Posted on 2012-10-25 00:00:00 | by jennyd | [ Reply to This ]

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