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    dots Submission Name: Invisible Lovedots
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    Author: metallichick786
    ASL Info:    32/F/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 78/85/52
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Misc/BrokenHeart
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    dotsInvisible Lovedots
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    Dried and weary the petals fall
    To the ground, no sound at all
    Leaves burn crimson as they slowly turn
    The bitter cold leaves me to yearn

    Autumn winds howl through my soul
    Time and tragedy takes its toll
    Frozen tears stream down my face
    Diminished memories burn to taste

    Forgotten love, abandoned trust
    Adoration guised your lust
    Season mirrors inner pain
    Hatred boils to a flame

    Pondering how much I can actually take
    Clutching my chest while my heart breaks
    It's time to go, time to move on
    Leaving this invisible love far behind







    Submitted on 2012-10-20 20:09:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I enjoyed the symbolism here of the season representing the end of the relationship. I think you made it easy for the reader to relate. Nice write. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2012-10-27 00:00:00 | by closetpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Truley amazing piece. Keep digging deep and find the inner self you so long to find.
    | Posted on 2012-10-25 00:00:00 | by jennyd | [ Reply to This ]


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