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Invisible Love

Author: metallichick786
ASL Info:    32/F/Cali
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Words: 102
Class/Type: Misc /BrokenHeart
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Invisible Love

Dried and weary the petals fall
To the ground, no sound at all
Leaves burn crimson as they slowly turn
The bitter cold leaves me to yearn

Autumn winds howl through my soul
Time and tragedy takes its toll
Frozen tears stream down my face
Diminished memories burn to taste

Forgotten love, abandoned trust
Adoration guised your lust
Season mirrors inner pain
Hatred boils to a flame

Pondering how much I can actually take
Clutching my chest while my heart breaks
It's time to go, time to move on
Leaving this invisible love far behind

Submitted on 2012-10-20 20:09:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I enjoyed the symbolism here of the season representing the end of the relationship. I think you made it easy for the reader to relate. Nice write. Thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2012-10-27 00:00:00 | by closetpoet | [ Reply to This ]
  Truley amazing piece. Keep digging deep and find the inner self you so long to find.
| Posted on 2012-10-25 00:00:00 | by jennyd | [ Reply to This ]

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