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Author:	DaleP
ASL Info:	57/M/TX
Elite Ratio:	6.21 - 629/553/330
Words:	114

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
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Falling for You dots

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No longer does this day suffice
nor in anyway can current mood
contain this spirit,
no not when it is the future
that
holds you.

My eyes have deserted me
they have departed with my
heart.
Together they seek the impossible
while I, wait in restraint.

Every hour of every day that
passed before there was you?
the sea has washed away.

It is the future where (live) resides.

Man can forge Iron
Heaven's elemental fires can forge planets

you forge hearts into stars
Now I am your shooting star
and I shall fall wherever you are.

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(live) ?

I like this, it has a feel of real dedication and expectation which I can relate to.

Lloyd
| Posted on 2012-10-27 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
Sensible and heartfelt, I see you are transforming and I like where it is heading.

| Posted on 2012-10-21 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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It means a lot to them, as it does to you.