Falling for You

Author: DaleP ASL Info:    57/M/TX Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 631 /554 /330 Words: 114

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Falling for You

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No longer does this day suffice nor in anyway can current mood contain this spirit, no not when it is the future that holds you. My eyes have deserted me they have departed with my heart. Together they seek the impossible while I, wait in restraint. Every hour of every day that passed before there was you? the sea has washed away. It is the future where (live) resides. Man can forge Iron Heaven's elemental fires can forge planets you forge hearts into stars Now I am your shooting star and I shall fall wherever you are.

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(live) ? I like this, it has a feel of real dedication and expectation which I can relate to. Lloyd

| Posted on 2012-10-27 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

Sensible and heartfelt, I see you are transforming and I like where it is heading.

| Posted on 2012-10-21 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]

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