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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I am just a woman,
    not a rock nor a brick
    dispersed in wonder
    to a man-
    an incomplete metaphor
    of blasted words,
    with spinning meanings,
    drafted to refract light
    in my head.

    By a look and a word,
    he stirred a dream,
    like skewers in my heart.
    I found myself in hopeless fancy,
    passing like a summer dye,
    that colored my heart blue
    like his eyes.

    In me alone, his love
    has been waiting patiently
    as leaves grown from a tree,
    and left myself diminishing
    from an outward sleep.




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      I hope this is always true, I love this one it covers my heart like a warm fluffy blanket on a cold night. Just remember the fancy is real and can happen soon
    | Posted on 2012-12-09 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      i suppose we are all "incomplete metaphors"

    dispersed througout the world..we are all unfinished poems who need that significant other to carry the metaphor through to the end of the poem--
    the relationships along the way are all just punctuation until we get to that final period, where all rests comfortably...
    really like the last two lines of this...especially...

    a really subtle love poem.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-10-22 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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