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    dots Submission Name: to those women like medots

    Author: She Is Insane
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 40/60/32
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsto those women like medots

    To those women like me.

    You left me fragile,
    As a single,
    In the ruins of yesteryear,
    Never quite,
    Good enough,
    Never quite,
    Always asking more,
    Never quite,
    Inside out,
    Ugly all I am.
    Monsters squeezing
    Ripping ribcages
    My intestines,
    All tore open inside,
    Not quite healed,
    Salt added,
    You said
    I quite like you
    I quite love you
    But not always,
    I said why
    I said you told me
    I was the one

    I was the one
    You will be by my side
    You will watch me walk
    Down the aisle,
    You said yes
    I said I don't know
    I was young
    I was quite unsure
    I was quite shy
    Back then;
    You shovel inside
    Move around, diced
    I love yous into
    I donít knows
    First jumping from this
    To that,
    Saying yes,
    Saying no,
    I-- squirming, begging,
    Hoping definitely.
    You dissected
    I give nothing,
    You give all,
    Youíre not enough,
    You say,
    Youíre too good,
    You lie,
    It wonít work out,
    You affirm,
    You walk out

    Submitted on 2012-10-22 13:14:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yes. I can relate.

    The dissociative nature was superbly spot-on. It mirrored the way ones thoughts race when you're collecting the pieces of a failed relationship trying to fill yourself back in.

    I'm lucky, yet. Though faced with the demise of my relationship over-and-over again, it hasn't fallen through--yet.

    the second half was far more potent than the first, but over-all, brilliant.

    | Posted on 2012-10-30 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]
      Confusion....trying to wrap your head around the irrational....cognitive dissonance....I can relate...interesting
    | Posted on 2012-10-25 00:00:00 | by closetpoet | [ Reply to This ]

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