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    dots Submission Name: Incandescent Momentsdots
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    Author: ImNotByron
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 2/2/4
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsIncandescent Momentsdots
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    She came into my life
    cloaked in mystery
    singing songs described only
    by the sirens in a distant harbor.

    She smelled of sea mist.
    Gliding on puffs of breeze,
    flowing in incandescent moments
    of unspoken passion.

    She blew scattershot kisses
    of hot breathed desire
    that flew by my waiting lips
    to an abstract destination.

    Her image was fleeting,
    my wanting sincere.

    She passes this way but once
    and I smile while I cry,
    for my heart was too slow.





    Submitted on 2012-10-23 15:15:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ah yes, there are those moments when life is as bright as the noon day sun, quite incandescent indeed!
    | Posted on 2012-10-29 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]
      " my wanting sincere" I was stuck here, just couldn't connect it to the previous line. Please do tell me more I think this is quite promising.
    I really like the last stanza here such a great way to end this piece.
    | Posted on 2012-10-26 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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