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    dots Submission Name: Detached dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Rant/Serious
    Total Views: 756
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    I am detached from all that surrounds me
    moving from one day to the next in a haze
    weaving a way through it all
    one catastrophe after another
    this affects me very little if at all
    for I am detached
    lost my counter parts to life
    - Survival tools and the outside world
    Only here existing - I stopped living long ago
    Believing in very little
    Loss of family
    Loss of hopes
    Loss of dreams...

    Leaves you this,
    An unemotional, detached, unspiritual, not capable of loving other's - personality... (me)
    I am only here surviving,
    weaving my way in and out of my days
    That is until a catastrophe gets the best of me




    Submitted on 2012-10-23 17:03:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      All I'm really getting from this piece is that...it is unfinished.

    The last line doesn't state "ending" to me, more like short break and the start the journey properly.

    I'd like to see more here, to see the real emotion the real writer and how it/they react to a crisis.
    | Posted on 2012-10-29 00:00:00 | by Localfreak | [ Reply to This ]
      the stated set of life is to live / sometimes the only thing we have to do in life is just breath -- an that's it an that all / because life (dead or not) is endless

    *weaving my way in and out of my days

    i love this line very much - it shows strength

    ~ bloodstone
    | Posted on 2012-10-25 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]


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