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    dots Submission Name: Addictiondots
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    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    I love it so, I do.
    The pain, I must,
    to see all of this through.
    Ravaged and alone,
    I think of what I've spent, only to be thrown a bone.

    What pleasure is worth,
    the torture that birthed?
    What lovers touch
    could become such a burdensome crutch?
    What rush could hold my soul, in it's palm, to easily crush?

    The tighter I hold,
    you become an obvious scold.
    I love you, I hate you
    moment to moment, an emotional coups.
    Desires impossible to construe.

    Withered and drawn,
    a shell of what once was brawn.
    I need it to exist,
    one more dying kiss,
    one last look, into love’s abyss.




    Submitted on 2012-10-23 17:54:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The lines just draw the reader into the emotions from verse to verse. Well done!
    | Posted on 2012-10-29 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]
      This is freaking amazing. You have an amazing talent for writing. The last part was truly my favorite part. You're my new favorite poet on here!
    | Posted on 2012-10-27 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]


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