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    dots Submission Name: Raindots

    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I feel the rain
    in every living drop
    that turns to puddle in the ground.

    every time it falls on the roof
    making water to sound
    like someone else's echo.

    I feel it.

    In every passing wind
    that choreographed leaves
    with the dancing branches.

    everything is alive,
    even when the sky is gloomy
    and no soul passes by.

    So let the rain command this day
    cold, dark and flooded.
    as you are not here.

    let it rain.

    Submitted on 2012-10-24 01:22:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      OK I am not going to fav like a hundred poems and that is where this is going.

    So let the rain command this day:-)
    I am so happy your poems are not fattening.
    Because I just keep coming back for more.
    | Posted on 2012-10-27 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this..the words are perfect considering our weather nowadays
    | Posted on 2012-10-24 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this out of my own fascination with rain. I like the way you mix the sorrow with the liveliness.
    | Posted on 2012-10-24 00:00:00 | by Snow9 | [ Reply to This ]

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