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    dots Submission Name: burntdots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 617
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 515



    Description:
       A poem about unnoticed love requested by my sister Ria.


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    dotsburntdots
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    when all lights fail to flicker
    and stars fall to fog his weary eyes
    when all is dim and daunting
    a sole candle burns to mingle
    on its own chained flame
    So is a heart who longed for another
    lost in the abyss of unwanted love
    for when the daylight overflows
    from his glittery glassy eyes
    the candle turns to an invisible light
    For he only sees it when there's nothing else
    burning to feed his earthly might.




    Submitted on 2012-10-25 16:49:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I cannot say I entirely agree with the format of this work. Personally I had difficulty reading it aloud.

    But, I love the words, some of the descriptions here light up my mind with visions of this lonely man.

    The tale is so true too, the lonely nights with nothing to think of are when lost loves haunt you.
    With the light of day and the call of duty there is no time to ponder so it will all build up again until the next lonely hour.


    Lovely write.

    Thank you for sharing

    Local

    | Posted on 2012-10-31 00:00:00 | by Localfreak | [ Reply to This ]
      "Own chained flame" really like this. Nothing more sad than unwanted love and you captured this very well. Do check out my page I also have a poem a little something like this.
    | Posted on 2012-10-27 00:00:00 | by quicksorrow | [ Reply to This ]


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