hypnotic was a word before it was was a drink... and that drink is spelled Hpnotiq, not hypnotic. trust me, I eye that bottle every time I pass it. Aside from the fact that haikus are usually not titled, I am impressed with this haiku- I know it's only three lines, but it sucked you in and then kicked you out on your a$$... Pretty little image. Have fun.
the first thing i did when i finished this piece was smile and say "ha". i've read some of the other comments that criticize it for being too short, but to me it says enough. also the fact that emerald has always been one of my favorite words to say outloud (try it! so much fun!) added to the joy. thanks for the ride lol
I like the 3 lines, but it feels incomplete to me. not sure where this is going [could be me—I can be dense a lot of times]. Anyway, maybe you want to continue this, maybe not. just a thought. :-)
And I like the way that you worked the shade and the spirit of chartreuse into the one succinct point. Cos.. I think chartreuse is a sexy and alluring sounding word... and the piece reflects it :)
Submission Name: Chartreuse
