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    Author: Anneboleyn707
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 44/84/67
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 608
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    Words, take back meaning.
    Rise to my gaping page, that still refuses to elaborate.
    Stop dreaming in the ground with the elders,
    the ants who collaborate but canít understand.
    Those who put you down there to rest,
    found half the heart in a non-artistís chest
    to be sufficient;
    A ten-year-oldís budding dimensions
    proficient to living intently,
    but I donít.
    Nor will I banish you to pledge myself dumb
    to the expanding horizons, no matter how fair,
    Because beauty is not if pleasing
    cannot compare to it.
    I do not exist, except for where you say I did and do,
    or survive to create truth.
    Because I wonít; I wonít.
    Iíll live to shake you from the dust each morning.
    If you refuse to keep all eyes open on your own,
    Iíll rouse you with ice water,
    and drag you broken and screaming home
    in conquest.
    Desperate, waiting,
    will be a family lost for words
    Who can no longer express how the silence hurts.




    Submitted on 2012-10-25 22:41:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This one is full of emotions and I like the words you used here. The last line made an impact on me. This a very true line and sometimes silence can be the most painful thing when you have no words to say.
    A very intriguing piece and very honest. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2012-10-30 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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