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    Author: karalove
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    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Why do you hate me so much?
    I don't think you really love me.
    I live through everyday, wondering if anyone out there really loves me.
    But right now I don't feel loved.
    I feel useless and unworthy of anything.
    I feel like a piece of trash that is always kicked around, blown around in the wind.
    Maybe I deserve this treatment.
    Maybe I'm just not enough to love.
    Maybe...
    Maybe...
    Maybe I was never meant to live.
    I don't know, and I don't have any answers.




    Submitted on 2012-10-26 16:22:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh, Honey. (I'm southern, it's a colloquial term--not meant to demean you.)

    I've been there. I don't know how old you are or what your story is, but I've been there. We've all felt those emotions.

    As an honest piece of feedback, I don't feel this was more than a journal entry. Polish it. Explore those feelings and truly shape them into a poem. Writing is about sharing, exposing. You're only on the surface. Dive into it.

    -Carrie.
    | Posted on 2012-10-30 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]


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