[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Closedots

    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 864
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1195


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    I'll close my eyes and gather you close
    amazed at how my world has slowed
    enveloped in your innocence
    envied for your sinlessness
    everything you girls have given me;
    put in perspective, all life's debris
    i keep you with me all the time
    i keep you with me in my mind

    everyday i'll think of when
    you would reach to hold your daddy's hand
    suddenly you're so mature
    smiles, admittedly demure
    someday soon you'll be on your own
    somewhere, i hope not far from home
    but you'll still be with me all the time
    you'll always be on my mind

    everyday i'll remember when
    you would reach to hold your daddy's hand
    i've gone from here what seems like years
    but still I'm with you, still I'm near
    in words, in laughter your children bring
    in bedtime songs that I would sing
    and I'll be with you all the time
    I'll be right there, on your mind

    And when you think of me and remember when
    It's simply daddy reaching for your hand.

    Submitted on 2012-10-26 22:15:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
    | Posted on 2017-01-03 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I hope writing this poetry piece helps heal you. You are a great father to have written this :) I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing closetpoet. This poem was close to pulling tears from my eyes :( + :) Love the style it was written in as well I agree with Carousel's comment. I can tell you love your daughters so very much!
    | Posted on 2012-11-03 00:00:00 | by BPchick | [ Reply to This ]
      Stunning. It really touched me as a mother, the words are so basic and true...

    These lines were so e
    cummings, it was uncanny.
    "i keep you with me all the time
    i keep you with me in my mind"

    Brilliant work. I'll have to see more. :D
    | Posted on 2012-10-30 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Estranged / Shocks written by Daniel Barlow
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    AI written by poetotoe
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Summer written by layDsayD
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Happy Saint Patrick's Day written by poetotoe
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    You do, I Do written by poetotoe
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Fasade written by jackz
    The Terms of Love written by poetotoe
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]