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    dots Submission Name: Closedots

    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I'll close my eyes and gather you close
    amazed at how my world has slowed
    enveloped in your innocence
    envied for your sinlessness
    everything you girls have given me;
    put in perspective, all life's debris
    i keep you with me all the time
    i keep you with me in my mind

    everyday i'll think of when
    you would reach to hold your daddy's hand
    suddenly you're so mature
    smiles, admittedly demure
    someday soon you'll be on your own
    somewhere, i hope not far from home
    but you'll still be with me all the time
    you'll always be on my mind

    everyday i'll remember when
    you would reach to hold your daddy's hand
    i've gone from here what seems like years
    but still I'm with you, still I'm near
    in words, in laughter your children bring
    in bedtime songs that I would sing
    and I'll be with you all the time
    I'll be right there, on your mind

    And when you think of me and remember when
    It's simply daddy reaching for your hand.

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    | Posted on 2017-01-03 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I hope writing this poetry piece helps heal you. You are a great father to have written this :) I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing closetpoet. This poem was close to pulling tears from my eyes :( + :) Love the style it was written in as well I agree with Carousel's comment. I can tell you love your daughters so very much!
    | Posted on 2012-11-03 00:00:00 | by BPchick | [ Reply to This ]
      Stunning. It really touched me as a mother, the words are so basic and true...

    These lines were so e
    cummings, it was uncanny.
    "i keep you with me all the time
    i keep you with me in my mind"

    Brilliant work. I'll have to see more. :D
    | Posted on 2012-10-30 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]

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