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    dots Submission Name: Always be behind the fooldots

    Author: Dead Bell
    ASL Info:    23/m/Ire
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 48/129/125
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAlways be behind the fooldots

    Always be behind the fool
    To catch his fall

    Whisper to his hear
    Things he will not understand

    For we are suspicious of
    Our second shadow

    Submitted on 2012-10-27 09:18:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      when i was reading this it felt that its about regrets.
    something like you did something and later your conscience starts telling you "i told you so"
    and i felt a hint of fight club on this.
    | Posted on 2012-11-07 00:00:00 | by w0ords | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and to the point-- always my fave. I feel this could easily be transferred to a haiku if you're interested in that kind of poetry. Is "our second shadow" another part of our identity? I think you're saying we're all fools, which I totally agree with :)
    | Posted on 2012-10-29 00:00:00 | by lolaxelmo | [ Reply to This ]

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