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    dots Submission Name: Always be behind the fooldots
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    Author: Dead Bell
    ASL Info:    23/m/Ire
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 48/129/125
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAlways be behind the fooldots
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    Always be behind the fool
    To catch his fall

    Whisper to his hear
    Things he will not understand

    For we are suspicious of
    Our second shadow




    Submitted on 2012-10-27 09:18:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      when i was reading this it felt that its about regrets.
    something like you did something and later your conscience starts telling you "i told you so"
    and i felt a hint of fight club on this.
    | Posted on 2012-11-07 00:00:00 | by w0ords | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and to the point-- always my fave. I feel this could easily be transferred to a haiku if you're interested in that kind of poetry. Is "our second shadow" another part of our identity? I think you're saying we're all fools, which I totally agree with :)
    | Posted on 2012-10-29 00:00:00 | by lolaxelmo | [ Reply to This ]


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